short meaningful words..... ...

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"vroom vroom:!: don't ride on my bike."

Hmm. You're asking God this? You'd probably have better luck asking yourself.

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What do we owe the most to our dreams? Our hopes, or our dissapointments?

hrm good work, well written, very straight to the point, i like

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this is very nice poem! i love it

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"...say yer prayers... not that it'll do ya any good..."
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dApress review

Who said it's impossible to express feelings in small poetry? This one is short but actually very sentimentalist. It may not look like it has some feelings expressed on it but once you read the description, you'll understand the poem. That's really the best point in this work, the sentimentalism.

As to the technical part: the words are simple and have not been placed to play with each other. Repeating the words How Many may seem like a common mistake from writers but it actually gives a nice feeling to it. It's like if the author was crying and screaming, asking why.

We all need to face the sky and talk to God at some point of our lives even if you're not part of any religious group. A lot of questions pop in your head then. That's why I feel this poem is pretty expressive. It relates to life and the problems you have to face and go through if you want to survive. Even thought it isn't a very elaborated poem, it deserves some extra points just for its meaning. We all should let words come out like this when we're facing a lot of troubles. You've done that very nicely.


Final Rating
(4/5)

Pros & Cons
The meaning behind the words
The simple yet expressive words used
The lack of technical care

I agree w/ the DApress review, nothing much to add.

Again could do w/ some lengthening perhaps... short poetry is fine but it should ideally be so short because it knocks the readers face off.

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Fredo, you're nothing to me now. You're not a brother, you're not a friend. I don't want to know you or what you do. I don't want you near my house. When you see our mother, I want to know a day in advance, so I won't be there. You understand?